Tony2-Dirty

I'm gonna assume you meant "Critiques." and there are some grammatical/vocabular errors as well as other stuff. Imma list them by number.

1. "One of these was the Sages of Ages, who sent out their best messenger, Cutiesaurs with a strange letter and an unknown location. All was going fine until he was intervened by the Cult of Bob who captured him and took him to Tombstone Hill. "

intervened isn't what should be there. replace that with 'interrupted' as intervened would imply that Cutiesaurs stopped them from doing something when that is not the case.

2. "Bob: Well, Cutie, The Sages might have been a little careless when they sent you. You shouldn’t have crossed paths with me."

The "you shouldn't have crossed paths with me" bit gives the context of Cutiesaurs having been actively seeking Bob out. IS that the case? I'm not sure, but as far as we're given, Cutiesaurs is just a delivery messenger who happened to get jumped by Bob's goons. Unless there is later context to show that Bob had been scoping out Cutie's spot and wait for him to go on a delivery, this part just doesn't make sense to me.

3. "The man: Hold it there fellow, take it easy. You took a good beating from that crossbow shot. They would have decapitated you if my adopted daughter Molly didn’t intervene and brought you to me."

I don't mean to be "that dude" but you can't take a beating from a crossbow shot. How does one take a beating from a crossbow bolt? A bolt is too flimsy to beat someone with it. Second, unless they had blades on hand that they were gonna use, you can decapitate someone with a single crossbow shot, unless it's a big ass bolt, but at that point it wouldn't be a crossbow, it would be a ballista. Finally there's no reason for the man to point out that Molly is his adopted daughter without ay prompting or provocation. He would just address here as his daughter.

4. "Earl: What do you know? It has

Cutiesars: Well I have regenerative powers. They come in pretty handy.

Cutiesaurs: Thank you. Now can I leave? I need to go to the outpost pub to report to the Sages here for my report about what happened to me."

that part right there, there has to be a period at the end of Earl's speech, and the first Cutie sentence needs to be a written as a thought, cause it would be weird from a dialogue standpoint for him to verbally address his healing factor then immediately follow it up with "Thank you, now can I leave?" It just sounds weird to hear and it would be weird to talk like that.

5. "Cutiesaurs: Well I was captured by the Cult of Bob and taken to Tombstone Hill and Bob shot me in the heart .That’s all I can tell you."

Two things here. One, was he shot in the heart or was he nearly decapitated with a shot? This bit is confusing. If its the former why bring up the decapitation earlier? If its the latter, then this is an inconsistency. Second thing is how would he know Bob's name. Bob didn't tell him his name, since he had to ask Earl who shot him, and Earl wouldn't have known Bob was there, just that the Cult of Bob was who shot him.

6. "Molly: Let me tell you the rest. I was going to Tombstone Hill taking my walk when I noticed some figures and when I got closer to them I noticed who they were. The Cult of Bob nearly cut off Cutie’s head for some reason and then they noticed me and ran away. They probably thought I was a Knight. When I walked up the hill I noticed Cutie and saw his wound, and he was still breathing but was unconscious. So I took him to my adopted father Earl."

some things here as well. First, thank you for addressing that they did have blades to cut his head off. Second if there were a decent group of them, plus their cult leader there, why would one person's presence scare them off? Assuming the Knights are like the Big Daddies from Bioshock where you don't come at them with anything less than a 30 man posse, there leader being there should boost there morale, no? Next, once again, they wouldn't address each other as "adoptive father/adoptive daughter" it would just be father/daughter.

7. Cutiesaurs: I’m itching for a fight (Cutie pulls out his sword.) Also, Molly is not my friend.

Molly then pulls out her bow and pulls it back then they begin to attack and Molly attacks the Slithers with her elemental arrows with good aim.

Assuming he used this sword to fight off the Cult of Bob, why would Bob let him keep the sword? Wouldn't he have just broken the sword during their assumed fight? And assuming they were gonna use his own sword to chop him, the moment they ran cause of Molly and she saves Cutiesaurs, how would she know that it's his sword? Would it not be dropped on the ground somewhere? Also why would Cutiesaurs not call Molly his friend? Considering she helped save his life, I feel like that would make them friends at least. It's not like Ironclad called her his girlfriend.

8. "Molly: Thanks, I’ve been practicing all my life thanks to Earl."

Would she not just call him dad?

9. At this point, this the third time I've counted the dialogical use of "For some reason." as an excuse for the current unexplained. You don't have to put the character saying "for some reason" unless they are asked the question of "Why blah-blah-blah?"

10. The out of nowhere question of "Do you have a family?" is weird. They literally just met that day, she isn't/shouldn't be comfortable with him enough to just ask that. Also the out of nowhere... I wanna say 'drama dump' from the two them feels kinda forced an unnecessary. Speaking of, Cutie's whole "I don't need friends leave me alone" Bit feels especially forced. Like you had to put that there.

11. Last thing

"Molly: I spoke with Earl and he told me that you are responsible for me because you need all the help you can get."

It should be that "She is responsible for him because he needs all the help he can get."

So yeah. Overall the premise and general plot is cool, but everything I listed is what needs work.